You know it’s going to be a long day…May 5, 2011
You just know it’s going to be a long day when you get a 100+ page document to edit from one of your authors and the first sentence is:
“The opportunity exists to enhance [software product] to enable the capture and retention of data relating to quarantine events while the event is assessed to determine whether it is an incident, non-conformance or not a quarantine or project related issue.”
Fortunately, the rest of the document wasn’t as bad as the first couple of sections. But this sentence alone took me about 5 to 10 minutes to nut out and reword so that it made sense. It was a while ago since I edited this document, but I think I split this sentence into two or more sentences.
My editing aims are the three Cs:
All with the aim of reducing another C: ‘Confusion’.
In this example, clarity trumped conciseness — I figured it was more important that the reader understood what was being said, rather than making it shorter.